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I’ve been recently discussing how to work out plotting issues with a writer friend—the type of plot knots where you have a good idea of the beginning and end, but too many possibilities for how to get from A to Z—and realized I’ve come up with a few principles that work pretty well for me. These aren’t one-size-fits-all; they’re just ideas that may spark something with other writers.
In Zombie Novel, I originally had an ending sequence that worked, but felt a little too smooth: Protagonists A and B kill Antagonist X’s henchmen and get away mostly unharmed. I need the villain X to live and be present in the sequel, so although A and B have good reason to kill him, they can’t. But then I realized: A can do something to X that will keep him alive long enough to perform his role in the sequel, but also put a ticking clock over his head. Does it complicate things? Yes, a bit—now my plotting with X has to be tighter because he’s working under a literal deadline. But A’s arc also ends much more dramatically, and sets up interesting questions and ramifications in the sequel.
Sometimes we choose the simpler, smoother route with plotting because working out the details of a new complication is overwhelming. And I think in first drafts, that’s fine: the point is to get the damn thing down and tinker with it later. But when we spot the possibility to make things a lot more interesting by throwing in a complication, we owe it to the story to see how it plays out. Does the complication make the story more compelling by not letting characters take the easy route, or is it just complexity for complexity’s sake?
While writing the first draft of Zombie Novel, I had a scene where all my protagonists survive a desperate chase and reach their car—and I knew someone had to be waiting at that car to throw a wrench into their escape. The problem: who was the most interesting choice? Every existing villain was, at that point, tied up in other plots. I could invent a new villain, but that didn’t feel shocking and intriguing enough. Villains are more effective when they’re someone we already know. What if it was a character who’d been introduced earlier, someone who had seemed fairly minor? Whose presence would initially be startling but then, in hindsight (and with a few revision tweaks), make total sense? There was someone who fit the bill surprisingly well, and once I chose to reuse that character and develop her role more substantially, other plot elements began clicking into place.
A huge part of the fun of writing for me is the invention: characters, conflicts, worlds, all of it. Sometimes, though, rather than work with what we’ve got, we creative, generative types have a tendency to invent new things to solve problems that could, with some elbow grease, be solved by existing characters and other elements.
Sometimes plotting feels like I’m holding an almost-finished Rubik’s cube, and as I near completion I lose the patience and discipline to flick those last few squares into place. Because once I start shifting one part, the whole thing could get messed up. It’s easier to just invent new things to solve problems rather than try to finagle the existing elements into a satisfying solution. Of course, inventing stuff to solve immediate problems just increases complexity later on, and results in an unsatisfying conclusion for readers…
In my friend’s book, the problem involves a pivotal role that could be performed by several characters, and one possibility is the MC. IMO, whenever it’s possible to more deeply involve the MC in the central conflict, it is probably a good idea to do so (barring complexity for complexity’s sake). Does the MC already have a damn good reason to be involved in the conflict? Would it be more interesting if they didn’t have a choice? Would making the MC the key to a certain conflict increase the pressure, the sense of urgency, and raise the stakes? Even outside the thriller genre, urgency and stakes drive reader interest.
This principle sounds self-evident, but you’d be surprised how often writers let it slip—even the big guns, like, say, George R.R. Martin. Remember when the A Song of Ice and Fire books were about Jon and Dany, the Starks and the Targaryens and the Lannisters? Martin let his love of invention get the best of him and filled his saga with countless minor characters, and now those characters and their plots and subplots within subplots are getting more screentime than the MCs. The central conflict is all but forgotten.
Our MC is—theoretically; ideally; possibly—the character most readers will most identify with. There’s a reason we chose them as the MC. There’s a reason the narrative revolves around them. It doesn’t always need to be a literal, plot-driven reason; maybe the MC represents the themes of the novel rather than functions as the actual lynchpin of the plot. Still, it is almost always the better narrative choice to force the MC to be an active participant in events rather than an observer, or a warm body which things happen to. Give them momentum; don’t let them move forward via inertia.
My friend and ridiculously talented graphic designer and artist Ed Ceisel has posted some incredibly spooky conceptual art on his site: Past Tense I and Past Tense II. Ed is planning to do some character portraits for my Zombie Novel in this style, and I’m pretty much bursting with fruit flavor, and excitement, after seeing these. His art seems to mesh so perfectly with my writing.
Check out the rest of Ed’s gallery. Dude is damn good.
This post is part of the Absolute Write October 2011 Blog Chain. The challenge: use a Lovecraftian word in a story.
This short takes place in the world of my Zombie Novel.
Footsteps outside the girls’ bathroom. Brady Henley held her breath and listened, the silence building in her blood, echoes of expectation doubling and redoubling until they beat a sonorous cacophony in her ears and she let her breath go in a burst. There was someone—something—out there. Something wrong. Pretty much everything out there was wrong, starting with the kids who’d jumped Ms. Cartwright in the middle of pre-calc and ripped her guts out of her belly. It had seemed like some kind of prank, some bizarre, unnecessarily realistic prank, until Brady smelled the wine-sweet reek of blood and something dark and earthy, something disturbingly like shit. She’d run to the next class down the hall and told Mr. Meers, but he didn’t believe her until he saw the blood on her jeans. She didn’t really believe it until then either. Maybe she still didn’t.
There it was again. Definitely footsteps, rapid, noisome. The power was dead, but a blade of light knifed beneath the door, notched now by shoes. Brady felt whatever was on the other side push, almost tentatively. The shadow-feet shifted. She wanted to believe it was in consternation, not ravenous rage. A voice called softly, “Is someone in there?”
“Nick?” she said.
“Let me in. Please.”
She stepped away from the door.
When it opened all she saw was a silhouette, hulking, monstrous in its anonymity. Anybody could be anything now. All the rules had been broken. The door closed and the shadow huddled against it, seemingly as wary of her as she was of it. After a moment she could make out the glint of wide eyes and furtively licked lips.
“Is anyone else alive?” Brady said.
“I was hoping you’d tell me.” He sounded like something deflating.
“Have you seen my brother?”
Nick was on the football team with Connor. He looked at the floor for a minute. “I don’t think so,” he said finally.
Weird thing to say. But maybe, like her, he wasn’t really sure what the hell he’d seen. Brady sighed and went to the window at the end of the stalls. Light pooled beneath in an iridescent mist, a galaxy of dust revolving slowly in the wan, milky glow. The lock was caulked shut from disuse. “Help me with this.”
Nick lumbered toward her. Before he got there, another set of footsteps resounded in the hall. They both froze. Survivors wouldn’t be so loud, so careless. Brady stepped into the end stall and motioned Nick to follow, grabbing his arm when he wasn’t fast enough. The stall was narrow and Nick was the type of flabby-fit football player who could throw his weight around like a wrecking ball. Their knees banged together. The menstrual refuse box dug into Brady’s butt, lid lifting and releasing a sour gasp of blood. Over Nick’s shoulder, someone had scratched JILL LOVES COCK into the stall divider, and below, in a different hand, ESPECIALLY YOUR BOYFRIEND’S.
The main door opened, a pale wedge cutting into the dark then disappearing. Stumbling, jerky footsteps. Ragged breath. Crammed in next to the big sweaty side of beef that was Nick, Brady felt like she was suffocating. So hot. Hard to breathe. Nick whispered, “You’re bleeding.” She glanced perfunctorily at her elbow, feeling the raw bite of air on exposed flesh when she flexed it. When he started to say more she reached up and clapped a hand against his mouth. His eyes shone above her, two giant gibbous moons.
The thing snuffled toward them like some animal. Brady glanced down where light seeped beneath the stall door. Watched as those stumbling feet came into view, trembling, twitching across the tiles as if an electric current zapped them into motion for a few steps, a meat puppet going limp until the next jolt. She heard it breathing above the beat of her heart. Something wet in that breath, raw. Like its chest had been opened up to expose the inner workings. It paused at their stall, and somehow Brady felt it looking at her, through the half-inch of metal, the thin shield of skin and muscle, straight into the frantic clutching fist of her heart.
Then it turned and staggered back the way it came. The hinge of light opened and closed. Gone. Safe.
Brady let her breath go in a long corrugated sigh. Felt Nick relaxing against her, his eyes rolling upward in relief. Her hand was still over his mouth. He looked down at it, then at her. The air played sharp and cool on her elbow, on the wound’s edge scalloped by teeth. Human teeth.
Football players. So damn big and sweaty. But for all his bulk she pushed Nick down easily, and it didn’t take long to get through that soft gut to the best parts inside.
Blog chain roll call:
Being the total visual arts geek I am, I like to have visual references for my writing. One awesome way to waste time you should be writing do valuable world-building is creating character avatars. If, like me, you could not draw your way out of a blind man’s house, FaceYourManga is here to the rescue.
I’m in the process of developing characters for my next project, and it is insanely helpful to visualize them—the subtle personality clues in facial expressions and eyes, etc. Granted, this is mangatized portraiture, not fine art—no profound psychological insights here. But when forced to compose a face with simple, iconic glyphs, it’s telling what you choose to portray a character.
Writer Jen Daiker is featuring my query for ZOMBIE NOVEL in her latest post on the QueryTracker blog, “Conveying Thy Characters in Queries.” Jen talks about the decisions that go into choosing which character to focus on in a query, which is something I struggled with while writing mine.
Here’s my query:
Rosa Farrow didn’t kill Ben Waters. She moved in with her brother to get away from violence: the alcoholic father who was behind the wheel the day Mom died. But she’s the last one who sees Ben alive. When his body turns up brutally mauled—with evidence of human bite marks—everyone wants to talk to her. Cops. Social workers. Even her brother seems unsure of her innocence. Rosa’s starting to feel like she’s in some waking Kafkaesque nightmare.
Until Ben’s body disappears from the morgue.
And he shows back up at school, bloody, pissed off—and with lots of murderous new friends.
That’s when he does the one thing you shouldn’t let the recently deceased do: he bites her. She flees with her brother, but something escapes with her, stows away in her veins. She’s infected. Changing. Becoming something like Ben. Becoming a monster even worse than her dad.
Rosa’s no killer. Whatever happens, she won’t follow in her father’s footsteps. But how can she fight something that’s inside of her?
The problem: Rosa isn’t the only main character. The novel is told in alternating third-person POVs from four characters. But mentioning these other three ended up both diluting and lengthening the query.
The novel comprises multiple parallel plot threads that converge and diverge as the characters join together and separate. How could I convey this complexity while maintaining the punchiness?
In the end, I decided not to. Rosa is the first POV character introduced, her plot thread contains the inciting incident, and her arc felt the “hookiest” —girl with troubled past suspected of murder, bite marks on boy’s corpse—so I decided to focus on her. I included sample pages with the query to help convey the scope and narrative style of the manuscript.
I’m not claiming this to be the best approach. It’s just the one that worked for me. With the limited time, space, and attention I had to capture an agent’s interest, I decided to focus on the character who evoked the essence of the novel, and whose narrative arc was the most initially compelling.
A query is not a synopsis. It doesn’t have to—indeed, should not—tell everything. It just needs to give enough sense of the main character, premise, conflict, and stakes to hook the agent into requesting material.
First, some code words so I can talk about my book. Let’s call it ZOMBIE NOVEL (evocative!). Zombie Novel is the story of five near-strangers whose path cross in the midst of a viral outbreak in small-town Iowa. The virus is of the zombie-making kind. Our MCs get infected. But they don’t quite become zombies—they become something both more and less than human.
Our main cast:
THE SISTER — She’s the Teacher’s 17-year-old sister. When her alchie dad wrecked his car and killed her mother in the process, the Sister got her brother to take guardianship of her. The Sister has a low opinion of deadbeats, alcoholics, authority, and adults in general.
THE TEACHER — Older brother of the Sister. He’s a failed novelist who teaches high school English as some sort of karmic punishment. Half his students are in love with him (see the Heiress); the other half want to be him; and the third half (yes, third) think a man this pretty has to be gay. Things might be a whole lot easier if he was.
THE HEIRESS — The Teacher’s prized student and bitter rival of the Sister. The Heiress is a rich girl displaced from the Big City to the Small Decrepit Zombie-Bait Town. She makes no secret of her infatuation with the Teacher, to the intense annoyance of the Sister.
THE DEPUTY — An ex-homicide detective from the Urban Jungle. The Deputy has seen it all and just wants to disappear into a small town where the worst you have to deal with is a meth lab explosion. When the others get infected, he allies with the Nurse, believing her to be uninfected.
THE NURSE — The Nurse was recently dumped by her fiancé after a one-year engagement. She’s about to turn the big three-oh and all she’s got to show for it are two needy cats and the first signs of clinical depression. The Nurse gets bitten early, but hides it, letting the Deputy believe she’s uninfected…because who else is going to take care of all the casualties?
THE SOUNDTRACK
More of this nonsense to come in the near future. Also, Spotify is awesome.
Update: listen to the Zombie Novel soundtrack on Grooveshark.
Just futzing around with some movie posters for the imaginary film version of my book.


Tech blogger and internet pioneer Anil Dash has posted his thoughts about NDAs (non-disclosure agreements) and why he won’t sign them. In the course of explaining why he doesn’t sign NDAs, Dash hits home with something that applies to all creatives:
If your idea’s that good, it’s probably not that rare. I hate to be the one to point it out, but protecting your idea in general is a fool’s errand—good execution is hard to find, but good ideas are cheap.
This is something new and inexperienced writers often get hung up on. At my favorite writers’ forum, there are endless questions about the originality of ideas, answered with endless advice about how precious ideas are and how fiercely they must be protected.
Dash’s admonition applies equally well to creative writing. Novelty of concept is vanishingly rare, even in those genres breaking the newest ground, like hard science fiction and speculative fiction. Artists borrow consciously and subconsciously from the vast canon of human creativity, rehashing and remixing old tropes, myths, theories, and eternal truths. What sets one idea apart from similar iterations is its execution. Literature is loaded with great ideas undermined by poor execution.
A couple of weeks ago, I was shocked when I discovered a post on the aforementioned forum by an aspiring writer whose main plot devices exactly mirror those in my Zombie Novel. While I’m pretty well-versed in both zombie literature and film, I’ve never come across the particular conceit used in my book. I thought it was a pretty novel concept, as far as zombies go. And then I found out someone else had the same damn idea. It was humbling. The difference is, this author is writing her book as a romance instead of a thriller. (Zombie romance…yeah. It takes all kinds.)
I worried initially about possible competition for being the first to “claim” the idea in print, but ultimately I realized the wisdom of what Anil Dash and others have said. The execution of an idea is often more important than its novelty. This isn’t to say that novel ideas are irrelevant; the point is not to obsess over safeguarding an idea that, most likely, someone else has already conceived, if not already put into some material form. Focus on perfecting the execution and realizing the idea in a rich, definitive way. And then you’ll be the one looked to as an authority and originator.